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1)Full Name: Michaela Adams
Date of Birth: 18th December, 1989
2)Gender: Female
3)Age: 18
4)Address: VP Cottage, Pine Avenue near Pinto Forest
5)Kids: 0
6)Pet: 1 puppy
7)Sign: Michae~
After finishing she gave the form to the man. The man went inside the shop and gave the form to a young lady. The lady called out her name and she went in slowly, the lady had a cryptic voice, she whispered to Michaela that she had been given the job. Michaela was really overjoyed with a sense of contentment but a little afraid too because she needed to be extra punctual for the job. The lady came more close to her and told her that she had to come before nightfall the next day. Michaela took a taxi and went back home. When she opened the door…her house was a mess! She examined the entire house. Her expensive sapphire earrings and 1 Million Dollars, her life-long earning, were missing. She called Selena but Selena also couldn’t find any trace what had happened but abruptly everything made sense to Michaela. She alleged the young lady and the strange looking man because when the odd looking man gave her the form it had asked the address and maybe the young lady had robbed the house. She told Selena everything that happened in the interview. Then Selena called the police and Michaela and Selena explained everything to the police. The police said that they will also go with her to West Twist Mall at nightfall. The following day Michaela and Selena were getting ready to go. Both of them and the police reached there but the mall was not open because that day was a holiday. Michaela was desperate, unexpectedly her phone started ringing and when she picked it up it was the lady! The lady said to meet her at the Elisa Coast. She told the police what the lady had said. The police took Michaela and Selena and drove off to the Elisa Coast. The beach was really far away from Sherman Oaks so it took about 2-3 hours to reach there. The Elisa Coast was not popular so it was quite empty there when they reached. A young lady waved to Michaela and she went running to see if her missing money and earrings were with her. But unfortunately, to her utter disappointment, it wasn’t the same lady. However, this particular young lady told that the job was counterfeit; she said that they were very precarious burglars and no one could ever catch them because they keep changing their appearances and their addresses. Michaela clandestinely called Selena and Selena called the police. The police sauntered slowly away from the spot with a sense of defeat. However, Michaela and Selena thanked the police for accompanying them. All the people in the beach have heard of the tragedy. It was just the beginning of Nightfall… The lady was finally discovered with her gang (as per the newspaper report) and were arrested. Michaela went back to her old job, everything went normal as usual but...a few years later when Michaela turned 25, She disappeared…and the Elisa Coast was sauntered by spirits in the orangish twilight, before the night fell…
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VERY NICE STORY. KEEP IT UP....
ReplyDeletevery nice story .. keep it up..
ReplyDeletewhere did she disappear ???
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@Menachry nobody knows :)
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A big thumbs up for writing this, Scorpio! Lovely...All the best...
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DeleteGood story. But everything happened so fast for me ...:-)
ReplyDeleteThis is my first attempt, I've got to learn alot from the other participants because i'm just a kid now :) Thanks for you feedback :D
DeleteThis one makes for a documentary...nice write
ReplyDeleteAll the very best :)
Thank you :)
Delete//The boss was slightly upset because Michaela was a brilliant worker but she was a very late comer. //
ReplyDeleteLol, looks like you have written about me! :D Nice write! And why spirits?! Curious!
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hehehehe..Thank you :) I wanted to make it scary so I thought spirits would fit in and kinda scary touch up also :)
DeleteInteresting plot.. but yes, it did happen a little too quickly :) Perhaps, more writing might make you better.. Great work, (Miss?) Scorpio :)
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I should definetly practice writing more :) Thank you for your feedback :D
Deletenice story, scorpio. You say you are ten years old. This is brilliant work for a ten year old! keep it up
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DeleteVery European feel w a so. California back drop, having lived there most of my life I was intrigued and really enjoyed the story.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you enjoyed it! :)
DeleteI liked your narration, but I have a few unanswered questions. How can a shopkeeper at the age of 18 have 1 million dollars, a cottage? May be I missed something in the story?
ReplyDeleteYes, there are certain flaws in my narration. I will try to overcome it in time :) Thank you for your feedback!
DeleteI am sure you will be much better over time, good attempt at BAT and good luck!
Deleteits a nice plot!
ReplyDeleteI suppose its you first attempt
work hard , you will reach more heights :)
all the best :)
Are you really 10? and all that vocabulary! You'll go a long way Scorpio! Keep writing! ATB for BAT!
ReplyDeleteThank you! :D yes I am really 10 :)
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hahahaha....thanks for suggesting! :D
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ReplyDeleteThe last line added mystery and intrigue . Very good attempt. Good Luck :)
Hmm. I have more questions than answers here :)
ReplyDeleteBut I like your imagination.
hehehehe...Thanks. :)
DeleteNice work
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Thank you~ :)
DeleteHey little One,
ReplyDeleteI just read that you are just 10. God! Thats very very impressive ! :)
hello little one! nice attempt...! you are really good with imagination! keep it up...!
ReplyDeleteGood luck with your writing and for BAT :)
so that explains why the sky turns orange at nightfall. :-) nice story and all the best.
ReplyDeleteThank you~~! :3
DeleteNice one Scorpio !!
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DeleteJust 10! I cannot believe.. Amazing writing.. I thoroughly enjoyed the plot and glad it was a happy ending and you have a wonderful imagination.. Keep writing.. All the very best..
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Do update the person name who introduced Blog-a-Ton to you..
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