Saturday, August 4, 2012

NIGHTFALL MYSTERY

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 30; the thirtieth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.
Michaela was a sensitive, unobtrusive, stubborn, thin and gorgeous girl with blue eyes, silky blonde hair and a diamond shaped face. On July, Michaela was planning to tour Spain but unfortunately her office work load was too much. She lived in Sherman Oaks in California and she owned a medium-sized cottage near a forest. She had a puppy named ‘Becky’. On a Thursday Michaela went shopping with her best friend, Selena. While shopping Michaela got a phone call for a job interview at the West Twist Mall as a Shopkeeper for the new store ‘Blingz’. Michaela was extremely overwhelmed! After they finished their shopping Michaela went straight to her office to resign from her current job, due to avid anticipation. Her boss was confused because Michaela didn’t even get the job but she still was resigning but the boss let her quit and showed her a ‘Thumps up’ when she was about to close the door, he also told her if she didn’t get the job she could come back to her old job but she said she was sure she would get the job. The boss was slightly upset because Michaela was a brilliant worker but she was a very late comer. The next day Michaela was getting ready for the interview. She wore white sleeveless top covered with a black half jacket with buttons and white denim jeans, for accessories she wore white hoop earrings and a charm necklace Selena had gifted her. For makeup she wore light pink lipstick, white eye shadow and very light pinkish peach blush. When she reached there, an odd looking man took her to the chamber and gave her a form to fill up. She went through the particulars and filled it up very diligently…
1)Full Name: Michaela Adams
Date of Birth: 18th December, 1989
2)Gender: Female
3)Age: 18
4)Address: VP Cottage, Pine Avenue near Pinto Forest
5)Kids: 0
6)Pet: 1 puppy
7)Sign: Michae~

After finishing she gave the form to the man. The man went inside the shop and gave the form to a young lady. The lady called out her name and she went in slowly, the lady had a cryptic voice, she whispered to Michaela that she had been given the job. Michaela was really overjoyed with a sense of contentment but a little afraid too because she needed to be extra punctual for the job. The lady came more close to her and told her that she had to come before nightfall the next day. Michaela took a taxi and went back home. When she opened the door…her house was a mess! She examined the entire house. Her expensive sapphire earrings and 1 Million Dollars, her life-long earning, were missing. She called Selena but Selena also couldn’t find any trace what had happened but abruptly everything made sense to Michaela. She alleged the young lady and the strange looking man because when the odd looking man gave her the form it had asked the address and maybe the young lady had robbed the house. She told Selena everything that happened in the interview. Then Selena called the police and Michaela and Selena explained everything to the police. The police said that they will also go with her to West Twist Mall at nightfall. The following day Michaela and Selena were getting ready to go. Both of them and the police reached there but the mall was not open because that day was a holiday. Michaela was desperate, unexpectedly her phone started ringing and when she picked it up it was the lady! The lady said to meet her at the Elisa Coast. She told the police what the lady had said. The police took Michaela and Selena and drove off to the Elisa Coast. The beach was really far away from Sherman Oaks so it took about 2-3 hours to reach there. The Elisa Coast was not popular so it was quite empty there when they reached. A young lady waved to Michaela and she went running to see if her missing money and earrings were with her. But unfortunately, to her utter disappointment, it wasn’t the same lady. However, this particular young lady told that the job was counterfeit; she said that they were very precarious burglars and no one could ever catch them because they keep changing their appearances and their addresses. Michaela clandestinely called Selena and Selena called the police. The police sauntered slowly away from the spot with a sense of defeat. However, Michaela and Selena thanked the police for accompanying them. All the people in the beach have heard of the tragedy. It was just the beginning of Nightfall… The lady was finally discovered with her gang (as per the newspaper report) and were arrested. Michaela went back to her old job, everything went normal as usual but...a few years later when Michaela turned 25, She disappeared…and the Elisa Coast was sauntered by spirits in the orangish twilight, before the night fell…


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40 comments:

  1. VERY NICE STORY. KEEP IT UP....

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  2. very nice story .. keep it up..

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  3. where did she disappear ???

    ATB for BAT

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  4. A big thumbs up for writing this, Scorpio! Lovely...All the best...

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  5. Good story. But everything happened so fast for me ...:-)

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    1. This is my first attempt, I've got to learn alot from the other participants because i'm just a kid now :) Thanks for you feedback :D

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  6. This one makes for a documentary...nice write
    All the very best :)

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  7. //The boss was slightly upset because Michaela was a brilliant worker but she was a very late comer. //

    Lol, looks like you have written about me! :D Nice write! And why spirits?! Curious!

    Do stop by my blog! Cheers - Kappu

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    1. hehehehe..Thank you :) I wanted to make it scary so I thought spirits would fit in and kinda scary touch up also :)

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  8. Interesting plot.. but yes, it did happen a little too quickly :) Perhaps, more writing might make you better.. Great work, (Miss?) Scorpio :)

    Leo at I Rhyme Without Reason

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    1. I should definetly practice writing more :) Thank you for your feedback :D

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  9. nice story, scorpio. You say you are ten years old. This is brilliant work for a ten year old! keep it up

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  10. Very European feel w a so. California back drop, having lived there most of my life I was intrigued and really enjoyed the story.

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  11. I liked your narration, but I have a few unanswered questions. How can a shopkeeper at the age of 18 have 1 million dollars, a cottage? May be I missed something in the story?

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    1. Yes, there are certain flaws in my narration. I will try to overcome it in time :) Thank you for your feedback!

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    2. I am sure you will be much better over time, good attempt at BAT and good luck!

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  12. its a nice plot!
    I suppose its you first attempt
    work hard , you will reach more heights :)
    all the best :)

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  13. Are you really 10? and all that vocabulary! You'll go a long way Scorpio! Keep writing! ATB for BAT!

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  14. " CRIME PATROL " or " C I D "

    you try for a job there at sony tv

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  15. Hi scorpio

    The last line added mystery and intrigue . Very good attempt. Good Luck :)

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  16. Hmm. I have more questions than answers here :)

    But I like your imagination.

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  17. Hey little One,

    I just read that you are just 10. God! Thats very very impressive ! :)

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  18. hello little one! nice attempt...! you are really good with imagination! keep it up...!

    Good luck with your writing and for BAT :)

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  19. so that explains why the sky turns orange at nightfall. :-) nice story and all the best.

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  20. Just 10! I cannot believe.. Amazing writing.. I thoroughly enjoyed the plot and glad it was a happy ending and you have a wonderful imagination.. Keep writing.. All the very best..

    Someone is Special

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